My Entry in the Susanna Leonard Hill 4th Annual Halloweensie Writing Contest!

It’s the 4th Annual HALLOWEENSIE CONTEST!!!!!

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Get ready for some great Halloween stories! You can check out all the entries in the contest at Susanna Leonard Hill’s blog HERE and mine right below!

The rules for the contest are (copied from Ms. Hill’s blog) –

“Write a 100 word Halloween story appropriate for children (title not included in the 100 words), using the words pumpkinbroomstick, and creak.   Your story can be poetry or prose, scary, funny or anything in between, but it will only count for the contest if it includes those 3 words and is 100 words (you can go under, but not over!). Post your story on your blog between right now this very second and Friday October 31st by 11:59 PM EDT”

Now – onto my entry! I hope you like it!

A Halloween Errand (100 words)

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© ray8 –


The run-down store was deserted, except for the bored check-out clerk.

I searched the shelves for the trick-or-treat candy Mom wanted.

“Pumpkins and broomsticks,” a voice whispered.

Creeeak, groaned the floorboards.

Goosebumps crawled up my back.

Wasn’t the store deserted?

“Pumpkins and broomsticks.”



I turned.

No one.

“Pumpkins and broomsticks.”


My heart pounded.

Forget the candy! I’m out of here!

A hand grabbed my arm.

I spun in terror.



“I can’t find the pumpkins and broomsticks,” said an elderly lady holding a shopping list. “I’m going to a party tonight. Can you help me look?”



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80 replies

  1. Excellent, Erik! What a fun story! I really enjoyed it. Great job! 🙂

  2. Spooktacular, Erik! Fingers, fangs and toes crossed that you win! 🙂

  3. Oh Wow! Erik! Really made me smile out loud. great job!

    Don’t let the Great Pumpkin get you!
    Happy Halloween! 🙂

  4. OOH! Good one Erik. Nothing is scarier than an old lady. Wait. That didn’t come out right. Anyway you scared me up good!

  5. Erik, Clicked on the LOVE button. Why it’s…it’s…(you know), Magsmashive!!! *wink* Outstanding job. So creative. And spine-chilling. What an ending!!

  6. Have a donut. 🙂

  7. I was held in suspense. Great super-short story.

  8. Erik that is amazeballs! You should try your hand at thrillers when you’re a bit older. You’re really great at suspense.

  9. Awesome job, Erik. I see a fine writing future ahead!

  10. That was suspenseful and such a fun read!

  11. PHEW is right! I’m so glad it was the old lady and not the ghost who lives in the storeroom of ALL 24-hour Stores!!!!! You knew that didn’t you? They hang out there because they can haunt 24 hours a day! Yes, it’s true.
    Really fun entry, Erik! Loved the suspense!

  12. GAH, E! You know I scare easy! That story made my paws twitch with fears! Good luck.

    Love and licks,

  13. I love surprise endings like this, ones with the chuckle factor. Great story, Erik! 🙂

  14. I LOVE it! Perfect suspense and great ending. Have a great Halloween.

  15. I actually jumped at the end. Great entry.

  16. Your story is GREAT, Erik the GREAT! What fun and very clever! ♡

  17. Ha, ha! Really nice twist to the story 🙂

  18. You built great suspense in this story, Erik! I loved the ending.

  19. Haha! Watch out for whispering old women in want of well-read asssssitance! Wonderful entry, Erik!

  20. Ha-ha! That was a fun surprising ending. Great job, Erik!

  21. Ooh, how fun, Erik! That was delightfully creepy! Loved the surprise ending 🙂 (And I have fixed your link on the link list, so hopefully you’ll get some more visitors now for your wonderful story! :)) Thanks so much for joining in the fun as always! 🙂

  22. This is nicely spooky!

  23. Great story, Eric–super suspenseful! As a parent, I am glad to know about your blog, now, too! Thanks!

  24. Ha, you totally caught me on the surprise ending!

  25. Great way to build up the tension. Totally didn’t see that ending coming!

  26. Super spooky, super creative, super cool, SuperKid!

  27. I was hanging on every word….Yikes! Glad to know old ladies get to go to parties too. I’ve brought casseroles but never pumpkins and broomsticks! 😉

  28. Haha! Way to go. Good luck in the contest. 🙂

  29. Very clever twist, Erik! 🙂 Good luck!

  30. I think I’m going to go around saying “pumpkins and broomsticks” in my head tonight. Great story!!

  31. Spooky AND fun! 🙂 Good job, Erik!

  32. 😀

  33. Ha – that’s great fun, Erik. Good job!

  34. Whoaoooo! that was scary! I’m not going shopping in little-ole stores anymore…. lol! Great writing Erik!

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